Post a better love poem

Max1337

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All you have to do is post a love poem better than the person above you...
Let's see how poetic you are!!!

Here's mine.
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The stars are shining bright tonight,
In the stars I see your face,
But You've now left without a trace.

I look for an answer in the dense sky
Yet there's no response, and now, I cry.
Wishing you were here with me,
To un-break my heart, to set me free.

The days are growing long and weary,
The nights are growing far less dreary,
For it is you I always see,
Up in the stars right beside me.

I'm in love with you, but such a fool,
It seems that you just can't be real,
But my heart still bleeds, my soul still feels.

A love so strong that I could die,
Like stars in the sky...
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I don't know if this is better then your poem....but I'll try....

Walking down the street, I see you
Walking down the street, you don't see me

Walking down the hall, I see you
Walking down the hall, you merely glance

Walking down the sidewalk, I see you
Walking down the sidewalk, you stare

Walking down the shore, I see you
Walking down the shore, you wonder, you wonder where have I seen him before?

Walking closer to the shore, I think about you
Walking closer to the shore, you remember where you've seen me

Walking closer and closer, closer then we've been before I glance at your eyes, peak a bit lower.
Walking closer and closer, you, wonder, why won't he say anything.

Now she is close, right next to me, and I think, if she wants me she'll try
Now he is close, right next to me, and she thinks, if he wants me, he'll try

We stand next to each other for 1 minute, without looking at each other, then we turn towards each other and say nothing.

We stand next to each other for 5 minutes, and still we don't say a word. We face each other, and say NOTHING.

The sun is going down, I said to myself.
It is chilly out here, she said to herself.

We got closer, then before, closer then 4 feet, closer then 3 feet, then 2 feet away we were from each other.

We face each other and say nothing. We stay facing each other for 2 hours, the sun is gone, and it was harder for us to see each other.

I can't see her, I think to myself,
I can't see him, she thinks to herself,

I better go now, I said out loud
Wait, don't go, will I see you again she said.

I'll stay here for hours, to have you this close,
I'll stay here if you stay with me she responds

I can't even see you, I replied
I can't see you either, she replied

It's really cold out here you know, said I
It is cold, but If I leave I won't hear you again, she replied

Aha now we are just going to hear each other huh? I said
I guess so, we were able to see other but now we can't, might as well hear each other now she replied,

Let's go I said, putting my hand around her waist
I have never spent 8 hours with a man, I don't know, but I don't care.

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Not sure if this is a poem, but it is something like that.

It's based on the way I met someone. Can't remember all the dialogue.
 
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What does Ugg boots have to do with Love??

I love you
Do you love me?
Only one dance
Then it’s over.
Will you remember me?
Like I will remember you
Come and dance
The last dance with me
This is our night
Let’s enjoy it while it last
We will go our own way
Where ever you go
The last dance is all I can give you
Here we are time goes so fast
Hope there will be a memory
Left in your mind
Because you will be my
Memory number one
If you ever get lonely
And think of this time
Remember the last dance with me
 
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